Everyone was
enjoyed last school
holiday with their
parents and siblings
like having a
family day at
interesting and amazing
places, while I was not.
I enjoyed myself
at my sweet
garden called ‘
Secret Garden ’.
I called it
secret because the
garden is place
at secluded corner,
far away from
the hustle and
bustle of life
and the noisy
chatter of my
siblings. Its soothe
me up and I can
let go all
of the worries
and trobles that
had been circling
in my mind.
As
I walked towards
it each day,
the roses’ sweet
scent welcomes me
from far. I hurried
to my lovely
hammock strung between
two trees in
the garden. Once,
lying back, a
soft breeze blew
in my garden
and I enjoyed
listening to the
rustling of leaves.
They seem to
be whispering in
a strange language
that I can
not understand.
When
I felt more
relaxed, I like
to amble to
the red and
white swing on
the other side
of my garden
and rock myself
rhythmically. I felt
recharged and refreshed.
Then, I take
a little walked
around the Secret
Garden, pruning some
leaves here and
just stroking some
there.
I
poured water from
watering can and
watched the drops
of water trickle
down the leaves
and feel onto
the porous earth
which absorb it
quickly.
In
my little paradise,
I watched nature
in motion. Since
that day, I
feel ready to
face the world
again after this.
Bonjour, afiqah. It's the new me. No la just kidding. By the way, I have rad your essay. It's sounds very interesting to me. Can you borrow me to use the one that you called as the "Secret Garden".>< pls. hahaa
ReplyDeleteThere are some common mistakes that I have found in your writing.
->1st paragraph;1st line, "Everyone was enjoyed...". You MUST remember to put ...ing after using word like was.
->2nd paragraph;3rd line, "all of the worries and trobles...". I'm sure that you have missed spelled it, right? 'It is troubles,dear not trobles.'
->3rd paragraph;2nd line, "I feel ready to...". You should 'use felt as it had happen.'
C'est tout ce que, afiqah!
My friend, Fyqa. I want to tell you to check you spelling carefully..
ReplyDeleteThe words 'can not' must be 'cannot'..
That's all..
Remember okay!!
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